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日常よく使われる英語表現を毎日紹介します。毎日日本時間の午前9時までに更新します。英文執筆・翻訳・構成・管理:上杉隼人

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Eigobin Special 2

2016-11-15 01:07:30 | 英語便 www.eigobin.com

「英語便」(http://www.eigobin.com/)特集、2日目の今日はGetUpEnglishの記事でチェックしてもらった例を紹介します。

 本年201641日、GetUpEnglish10周年を迎えました。

  その際のみなさんへのメッセージは、英語便に添削してもらいました。

 本日のGetUpEnglishは、その添削例をご紹介します。

01.Today, 1 April 2016, marks the tenth anniversary of GetUpEnglish!
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03. I want to thank all of the people who have come to this site to learn English.  
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05. I have a great passion for English language learning, and it is one of the my biggest dreams of my life that we , Japanese people , learn English and other foreign languages proficiently.  
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07. If , during these past years , I have been able to help you in any way at all in your English-language studies, then I am very happy.  
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09. Thank you again, and please keep clicking on GetUpEnglish in the coming year.  
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11.  With the warmest Best wishes to you all.  
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13.  Hayato Uesugi
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オレンジ:スペルミス/紫:変更されたワード/赤:付加された必要ワード/緑:不必要なワード/青:意味が解りづらいもの/不自然な言い回し/青緑 : Impressive!(自然/クリエイティブな表現)

先生からのコメント

01. Nice use of the verb 'mark' here to mean commemorate an anniversary.
Use lowercase letters here. Capital letters are often seen as shouting in a document.
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03. A great opening statement to show your appreciation.
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05. Use 'my biggest dreams' to show clearly that it is your hope.
'of my life' is not needed, because it is understood in the context of the sentence.
We use commas to separate words or phrases that mark where the voice would pause slightly.
For example, 'James, our tour guide, lost all of our tickets.'
Add 'other' here to show that there are more languages, without being exact about what they are.
Excellent adverb choice.
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07. Use 'these' to refer to recent times or things that are happening now.
We use the phrase '...help you in any way' to express the idea that you have helped a little or in some way.
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11. We commonly use 'best wishes' to sign off a document, especially in a more formal context. 'warmest wishes' is usually reserved for those you have a very close relationship with, such as family or friends.
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13. In English, your first name comes before your family name.
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This is a well written document.
Your tone is friendly and your gratitude to those using your site is obvious.
You also have used a variety of language and grammar structures to convey your message in a clear and easy to understand manner.
Nice work!

  この修正を反映した記事がこちらです。

 http://blog.goo.ne.jp/getupenglish/e/d6856b19e6ca8b51d0d71bdccacaba15

  明日のGetUpEnglishでは、英語便http://www.eigobin.com/にチェックしてもらった原著者へのメールをご紹介します。 

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