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Since April 1, 2006 (c) 2006-2024 Uesugi Hayato(上杉隼人)
「英語便」(http://www.eigobin.com/)特集、2日目の今日はGetUpEnglishの記事でチェックしてもらった例を紹介します。
本年2016年4月1日、GetUpEnglishは10周年を迎えました。
その際のみなさんへのメッセージは、英語便に添削してもらいました。
本日のGetUpEnglishは、その添削例をご紹介します。
01.Today, 1 April 2016, marks the tenth anniversary of GetUpEnglish! |
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03. I want to thank all of the people who have come to this site to learn English. |
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05. I have a great passion for English language learning, and it is one of the my biggest dreams of my life that we , Japanese people , learn English and other foreign languages proficiently. |
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07. If , during these past years , I have been able to help you in any way at all in your English-language studies, then I am very happy. |
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09. Thank you again, and please keep clicking on GetUpEnglish in the coming year. |
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11. With the warmest Best wishes to you all. |
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13. Hayato Uesugi |
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オレンジ:スペルミス/紫:変更されたワード/赤:付加された必要ワード/緑:不必要なワード/青:意味が解りづらいもの/不自然な言い回し/青緑 : Impressive!(自然/クリエイティブな表現) |
01. Nice use of the verb 'mark' here to mean commemorate an anniversary. |
Use lowercase letters here. Capital letters are often seen as shouting in a document. |
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03. A great opening statement to show your appreciation. |
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05. Use 'my biggest dreams' to show clearly that it is your hope. |
'of my life' is not needed, because it is understood in the context of the sentence. |
We use commas to separate words or phrases that mark where the voice would pause slightly. |
For example, 'James, our tour guide, lost all of our tickets.' |
Add 'other' here to show that there are more languages, without being exact about what they are. |
Excellent adverb choice. |
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07. Use 'these' to refer to recent times or things that are happening now. |
We use the phrase '...help you in any way' to express the idea that you have helped a little or in some way. |
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11. We commonly use 'best wishes' to sign off a document, especially in a more formal context. 'warmest wishes' is usually reserved for those you have a very close relationship with, such as family or friends. |
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13. In English, your first name comes before your family name. |
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This is a well written document. |
Your tone is friendly and your gratitude to those using your site is obvious. |
You also have used a variety of language and grammar structures to convey your message in a clear and easy to understand manner. |
Nice work! |
この修正を反映した記事がこちらです。
http://blog.goo.ne.jp/getupenglish/e/d6856b19e6ca8b51d0d71bdccacaba15
明日のGetUpEnglishでは、英語便(http://www.eigobin.com/)にチェックしてもらった原著者へのメールをご紹介します。